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  • Art » Literature, Culture
    Re: Fear

    I think this explained some feelings about fear. It gave some brief examples and I believe it could benefit from a personal example of how you encountered fear. I think ...

    Aug 3, 2015

  • Article / Essay » Culture, Realistic
    Re: How to Be a Lady

    Hmm. I my personal opinion, I don't believe there is a definition for being a lady other than being classy and sophisticated. But in the world today, lady is just ...

    Jul 27, 2015

  • Article / Essay » Realistic, General
    Re: Neelerry, clean or unclean?

    Well first of all. I like the fact that it had the message that the world has become a bad place where people are used to having pollution and basically ...

    Jul 27, 2015

  • Poetry » Fantasy, Literature
    Re: Poems of Imagination

    I feel as if this poem could be the intro to some amazing show where they have legendary armor and what not, but I thought this poem was surely and ...

    Jul 24, 2015

  • Other » Fantasy, General
    Re: Victorian

    This is an interesting piece, it is short but describes a scene, essential to a world where a girl is bullied at school, but doesn't have enough money to go ...

    Jul 24, 2015

  • Short Story » Narrative, Teen Fiction
    Re: Help.

    Hmm. This started as the typical school teenage set up. Rya full of anger was helped by her friends by playing confidante. Rya gave a lot of gifts to the ...

    Jul 24, 2015

  • Short Story » Realistic, Mystery / Suspense
    Re: The Boy in the Tree

    Hmm. This story could be better. I mean, it switches from first person to 3rd person manner really quick at the beginning. I think you are confusing the 1st person ...

    Jul 24, 2015

  • Short Story » Supernatural, General
    Re: Heart Aside

    This seems like a real book, I would read in a book store. I consider you think about you getting this story published. Though, it has some missing elements. Cain ...

    Jul 24, 2015

  • Short Story » General, Mystery / Suspense
    Re: The stranger

    This was an okay story. I will say not much happened in the story. Basically it delivers a vague scene of her moving to a rural town and then laying ...

    Jul 24, 2015

  • Art » General, General
    Re: Can I Have Your Number?

    So, I also do comics. I like your style of art but it could be done a bit better. Better proportions and characters positioned a bit better. I mean I ...

    Jul 22, 2015

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: in my dreams i am i am

    This poem has a nice turn of events. I actually sung it when I wad reading it. It has a nice tune to it and reminds me of something I ...

    Jul 22, 2015

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy
    Re: Pull Apart The Earth: 1

    Well, I think its good that you can write even after you've finished a work shift. And well to tell you the truth, the descriptions of the circumstances in the ...

    Jul 22, 2015

  • Novel / Chapter » Humor, Supernatural
    Re: Kasza the Reaper

    I'd say, its interesting from the description you gave. Kasza's appearance could use some more explaining or rather more description. Either something like "Kasza was a normal boy except" or ...

    Jul 22, 2015

  • Poetry » Humor, Realistic
    Re: Soggy Lampshade

    I am thinking that you are referring to a sexual component of the female frame. Because to me, the title seems like it referring to light coming from something wet. ...

    Jul 10, 2014

  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Dramatic
    Re: Days of Future Pryde: Chapter Two

    I think this a good representation of the X-Men series and one of their possible story lines. Though, I still think this story could do with a bit more imagery ...

    Apr 6, 2014


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