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to chew on our cheeks and stare at the moon

  • Poetry » General, General Re: heartburn (heart burns)

    ahh thank youu

    Feb 20, 2024
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: according to zeno's paradox

    Hello Em16! I definitely see what you're saying with the disconnection between certain lines; I think I could improve the cohesion in the poem overall. Thank you for the feedback!

    Jun 13, 2022
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: according to zeno's paradox

    Hi erilea, thank you for the review!! I appreciate your comments and feedback, especially about the fragility of a machine in the ocean and considering which lines could use more/less ...

    Jun 13, 2022


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