Cailey

Hey, I'm here to review! First of all, I just want to tell you that this was really confusing. As a way to clear it up I would suggest punctuation ...

Before anything, I don't really agree with this. I think God is loving and caring, and yes, He can choose our death and birth, but it's not selfishness, it's part ...

As for actual editting, you just need to read over this a few more times. Make it flow, and fix a few typos in there. However, if you don't mind ...

Hey, so here's my little bit of advice. It's actually been forever since I've reviewed anything, but anyway, here goes. First I'll let you know what I disliked. For one, ...

So, before I forget I'll give you the things I think you can change. First of all, the third stanza. to me it felt out of place. It didn't fit ...

this was good; I wish I had a better review for you, but it was really short and simple. You didn't make your readers guess at the ending, which is ...

Like you said already, it needs to be edited. I caught some mistakes in their. Anyway, great job, this definitely has the element of horror and fear. It's a good ...

Woah! Well, I read you say it was dark and that's why it wasn't under romance. But I wasn't convinced until I started reading. :) So great job on the ...

this is good, but there are some spelling mistakes and a few places that are worded awkwardly. I really like the overall idea of the poem, and the way you ...

Lovely! the last line made me laugh, thinking that all this was just parts of an atom. I was seriously expecting a different ending. But I liked yours. You captured ...

Wow! I love this, absolutely! there is so much emotion here and I can put myself in this situation. It's very well written, and it's just, well it's good. As ...

this is really sad, although it does kind of bug me, why does it have to be the end? I mean, it's possibly to keep a long distance relationship. Hard, ...

this is pretty funny and cute. :) I like it as a poem and I'm sure it's even better as a song. there isn't much to review, I didn't catch ...

I liked all the cliche! Really, it was a sweet poem, easy to identify with. I think you may have had too much punctuation that wasn't needed. So, you may ...

I must say I love the poem and the idea behind it. My only nitpick is the rhythm, in several places it felt like you were focusing mostly on the ...