Boni_Bee

Ok, I changed it :) I'm glad it was was meant to be :) lol You don't have to punctuate Mr any more so there!!! lol

Wow! :D It's beautiful!!!

Thanks, Mesh, :) Well, her jeans were old ones, and they were dirty from falling over etc... I'll try and stick with one tense, but I keep forgetting and usiing ...

Thanks, Kay Kay. :) They are going to Australia, it says so in the first chapter. And the rest of the people on the boat are going there too. Sorry ...

Could someone crit this??? :? Please!!! :)

Chapter 2 The masts of the Jeffina creaked, and the boat rolled in the water gently, as the sailors carried casks of salt pork and biscuits on board. They would ...

Thanks, Mesh!!! I"ll have to sit down one day and think about changing it, lol! :) I understand what you mean. The spy is someone 'I' know, as you will ...

Thanks!!! It helped. The guard is a newbie to the regiment, and his heart isn't hardend yet, and he's falling in love with Emily (lol), and they...no, I won't ruin ...

Ok, I give in :? lol

oh, just seems more like a 'he' story...

You mean 'he'??? lol

I didn't like this. It was rather spooky, but the pace is too fast, and it gets you a bit confused. One minute he's here, the next minute he's could ...

Its cool :) Very abstract, in the characters and I like it how you have switched everything around...good job

ok, I get you now :)

Thanks, Snoink, now you've confused me!!!! :? lol, it's ok. I get what you mean...I keep trying to keep it in Past Tense, but sometimes I get off it... lol ...