BlueShift

Hey guys :) I took your comments into account and rewrote the last two stanzas. Hope it turned out better. o_O

Thank you so much everyone. :) You're right, the last stanza kind of took away the heavy, pensive feel that should have come with this poem. Will be reworking it. ...

@DoubleThink: thanks for noting those things :). I'll be making those revisions when I put up this story somewhere else :).

@Auteur: Thanks :). I was thinking of expanding the plot, actually, because I'm sure my idea of hope and faith in the government can still be further explored.

I'm not very good at titles :(. I suggest you make it about Fluffy's diary, like, "The Villainous Accounts of Fluffy the Alien Cat". That's just a really bad example, ...

@Blue Princess: thanks, I'm glad you liked my story :)

@Jenthura: Thanks for noting those details! And I did struggle with the transition a bit, thank for the suggestion :).

@Explosive_Pen: ah, thank you for noting my problem with tenses @_@. I tend to do that a lot ^_^'. And you're right, Rose's character is lacking depth. Her persona will ...

@bailecielo: haha, well, I can't say this was really drawn from experience. I don't think I had ever been so dejected as Rose :). @Hannah: wow, that's a great review ...