Blackwood

Thank you so much for reading it. Yeah those "ahh' things didn't really satisfy me either, and I was considering not putting them in but in the end just threw ...

Well in the story he doesn't die. He could die after the story ends easily, but as far as the story goes he isn't dead yet.

He was shot in the lower shoulder on the opposite side to the heart. I choose those words carefully.

Also I would like to add that at the every end of it it reverts to first person so you find out that this ghostly person was addressing his sister ...

The character has a huge back story. You will find it in Episode 1-10 of Days of Gold gone by. You should have noticed that in the authors note and ...

Mmm yes, I wanted to try second person.

Yo bro, I agree with you! Especially the people who say "I don't understand Sorry" and leave it. However I feel that people being rude about it is the lesser ...

I think it's pretty obvious he isn't dead. it says right at the end that he is bleeding out, and that he moaned or something.

The other guard isn't dead. I imagined them both to be men, but up to you. The person never died, they are just bleeding out, leaving it open ended. It ...

Hmmm good ideas, especially about the mother. I'm going to aim for the bonus to be kind of separate from the mains story so it can possibly act as a ...

Wow... that's a lot of semicolons. Didn't really notice them all there, just wrote it. I tend to like them....

Thanks for reviewing all of these. It makes me happy and I appriciate it. As for the conversations, my intention was to have the first one make more sense backward ...

Hmmm, their families are really close in general, basically Akiras family just chill around Junes place whenever they please XD. It shows that in episode 10 also. (The unreleased one)

Hmm, no it was far away from the train-station to Junes place. June wasn't coming from his house from the train station, he was coming from Tokyo or where ever ...

Thanks for the nitpicks too. Hmmm.... A nice point you raised but its hard to describe He doesn't sneak in... he climbs out, trying to escape. June would probably think ...