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  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Maiko of Gion

    Very interesting, good flow, flow is very important, though the bit after the second break could use some tweaking. There are a few mistakes after the second break, like here: ...

    Jun 28, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Lithium-preface

    I like it, the beginning really grabs you, but...on to reviewing. The beginning flows well but once you get to "When I finally finished...", you know, out of his mind ...

    Jun 28, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Light Blue Eyes - Prologue

    Well, I hate to re-state, but I agree with Fortuna. What gets me though is how Riim said she "never had a stomach for traveling", why not, what is traveling ...

    Jun 28, 2009


The bigger the issue, the smaller you write. Remember that. You don’t write about the horrors of war. No. You write about a kid’s burnt socks lying on the road. You pick the smallest manageable part of the big thing, and you work off the resonance.
— Richard Price