BigBadBear

This part isn't really in the perspective of anyone, But your telling the story from the POV of Amelia..... Anyway, great job! This was a great start. There is only ...

Ugh. This stinks. Oh, no! Not your poem! It's just that I wrote this big huge long crit for you, and the freaking internet died... :cry: Anyway, I'll redo it! ...

Wow. Very 'dirty'. XD Great job, Yoyo! This was very... sexy and good! I would love to lay on the grass with a girl... *daydreams* Anywho... they are on the ...

Holy crap. I want to cry right now. Seriously. This is one of the most touching things ever. I mean, all stories end like this, with the lover dying (if ...

Hey, pieman! What's up? Haven't seen you around very much! My edits are in BOLD . Not much can be said of a simple crush. A simple crush is too... ...

Hey, bud! I really have no clue why I haven't gotten to this sooner... this story is so great! There is nothing for me to critique here... but I need ...

Well done, Vernon. This is an incredible story you have going here. At first, I thought that this was going to be a slightly stupid story, but I was proven ...

Awwh. That was really nice. Almost lyrical. Ok, there was only one line that didn't flow because I think there too many/less syllables in it. Make lovers cuddle ever nearer; ...

Hey!! Well, this was really good. It caught my attention easily, and I was only a little unsure of what you meant, but in the end I understood it. I ...

Hey! Thanks for posting on 'Need a Crit?' This was good, I'll admit. I do want to continue reading further, but for now I feel that there is one thing ...

Hey! Thanks for posting in, "Need a Crit?" Well, this story was good. It held my interest and it was well written. It just doesn't seem realistic. I called him, ...

Hey! Thanks for reading StoweAway!! He walked from me face plain, and eyes as gold as ever, full nothing. Yeah, this sentence makes no sense. So I'll edit it. He ...

Wow. That was really good, Suz. Really. I was really very bored until I learned that they were killers. Suddenly I was turned on and quickly read the rest. Great ...

Well, that was... weird. But amazing, too! Cat, this was waaaay cool! My only suggestion would be maybe to put comma's in some places.?> "Find cover. Run, run, run. Limping. ...

Wow. I wouldn't have expect you of all people to write something like this. The main problem wiith this is that I think it's too obscure, too nonsenical, too all-over-the ...