BigBadBear

Hey, Wozzel! I'm baaaaack! (getting tired of that? I'm not!) This was a really good poem. I think that you conveyed the message quite clearly. But, there is always room ...

Hey! What's up? Ok, I have to go start by saying: use capitals! Please. It makes it sooo much easier to read! You don't have to capitalize every line, just ...

Wow, Yoyo! This was so good! I loved it! I'm no good with poetry, but I can tell you what I liked and didn't like! I liked this line: the ...

Wow. You only got a crit from Jabber on this one? O.O Great chapter, as always! You've really got a talent for writing, I'll give you that! Every chapter is ...

Hey, Wozzel! I'm baaaack! Awesome chapter, although I think you could extend it. He hasn't been in the prison for long. He's probably lost hope. Maybe add some detail of ...

Well, I can't say that I agree much with the above comments. I agree with you! This is the first entry in a dairy (hehe I like the misspelling) and ...

Hey! I'm baaaack! awesome chapter. I like the journal, although it was really hard to understand what was going on. But I think, because you're an awesome author, you will ...

Hey! I'm baaack! (bet you're gettting tired of me saying that, huh?) This was an ok chapter. The cop wasn't exactly the most well developed character. He was just... blah. ...

Hey! I'm back again! Well, this was by far the best chapter! I love the whole phone thing and (surprisingly) it was easy to follow! You have some awesome ideas, ...

Hey! I'm baaaack! What's up? Awesome. I loved it, although I really found it hard to believe that he jumped up a hundred feet... until I read that he the ...

Hey, Wozzel! What's up? I've heard you talking about this someplace else, and you always give me crits, so now I'm here to return the favor! Well, you've intrigued me! ...

:shock: Snoink! :shock: .... Whoa... that was... uh... I don't know what to say... that was... very.. perturbing! How about that? Well, one more thing: Eeeeeew! BBB heheh

Hey! I'm baaaaack! My heart ached as my love drifted away; he no longer cares for me, but I do for him so dearly . Great first sentence, although you ...

Hey, Phebe! What's up? Your blood is my drink; Your eyes are my future; Your body is my fortresse; And your mind is my soul. Very nice. The flow was ...

Hey, Penguin! I'm here to give you three crits. So, here is one of three! Nice poem. I liked the edit a lot more than the origanal, mostly because it ...