BellaRoma

I don't mind the "~~"s

Could I suggest breaking this chapter into smaller parts? It would build more suspense, and make taking in the info easier (instead of from one long text)

Oh... See, I struggled to make any of that out of the text (could just be me, though). Sorry *embarrassed* Ah, the name, I now get. As to the Lord ...

How weird...

Post again soon!

Thank you for the reviews. I hope things clear up next chapter. I'm trying to go into motives for Layla and Sara.

Oh, the newspaper clipping! From the day of the murder. A certain psychotic doctor brandishing it to terrorise her... PS. When I said evil-sounding, I was talking about the reference ...

Thank you for the review. I did think about the sentence structure a bit, but that's more the way I write (which I'll work on next time). Sara definitely would ...

Thank you for the review! I have a whole list of things I want to address once I'm through with the first draft. This thing with the parents is on ...

No worries. I will definitely read the next part. Maybe this entity can take over the narrator (who's also nameless, now I think of it)? That would change her... I ...

Thanks so much for the review! PS. Love the new avvie.

That makes a lot of sense... I don't know how I noticed, haha

Sorry about the apostrophes in my reply being funny. PS. What chapter would you recommend I do the Spoken Word thing from? It will only be a small extract.

Thanks for the review :) I didn%u2018t mean it to sound like Layla was grilling Sara. Not yet!! Now she%u2018s found the file, she might...

I wasn't sure if I was going to add other chapters around this. Thanks a lot for reading, though :)