BellaRoma

Thank you. To answer your last question, you got it in one. Later in the storyline Layla is 17 years old. As to the vocab I guess I wanted her ...

By the way what does 'appositive phrase' mean? See what I mean about the grammar course! PS. Hope you get round to checking out my first two chapters when you're ...

There's an art to it. All the structure is different and there are other devices I've never really used. I think I will have a go when I'm done with ...

No problem. I've read the new bit as well, can't remember if I put a like on it or not. The whole trapped in the game thing is totally awesome.

I still don't see it. Oh well - it's resolved now. Please read the earlier chapters, I don't see how you can make much sense of this without them. C'mon, ...

What made you think that? Just wondering if it might confuse anyone else.

Sorry. Had to refresh the page and that made me post it twice so I've edited the comment so the site doesn't think I'm spamming you.

I don't know what it is about it but I love astrology (I can name the star signs) and my favourite bit was always the gods and their powers. How ...

Fair enough. I really do like the idea of a fanfic contest. There are all SORTS of books/sagas you could base it on. Once again, good luck!

Sorry but HE? Her name is Layla. Again I'm sorry, it could have been an accidental typo. I do that sometimes but Layla is definitely female. Maybe that's my fault, ...

Thank you. The nitpicks will help me. I have screwed up the dialogue, man I can't get that right! Not to be pushy bur you should read the earlier chapters. ...

Sorry. I would have made it 'part 1,2 or 3' but the labels were already too long. In my head it was logical enough. Another novel would be in another ...

Stupid question: did you read the first two? I only recently labelled them to prevent confusion. Check them out in related works if you didn't, it may make more sense ...

Hey guys! I think I'll get mixed responses here. Hope this gives readers a walk in Mercy's shoes. What do people think of her now?? Another point: I've been told ...

Sorry for the blank comment. I must have posted my review twice by accident. *cringes*