BelarusBirdy

I'm literally shivering after reading this. It's so powerful! You're a really good writer!!

Last stanza is my favorite.

Sorry, but I don't really have much of a review, I just want to say this is really awesome.

awesome! I love it, it's very clear and kind of makes me think of Evanescence music.

I both yell at inanimate objects and wonder why fictional characters never pee. so yes, I am normal. I like bagels too.

I'm listening to the song 'Fallen' by Florence and the Machine. One of the lines is "I've fallen from grace." It's weird yet awesome how the timing on that worked...

I agree with jasmine. This is a beautiful piece. Don't change a thing. It is perfect. I love all the words and the comparisons. THey were so unique.

I agree with SubjectBlue about the originality thing. Also, you spelled hue wrong. It should be huem but you said hugh.

Not really creepy, more honest. Great poem! Keep Writing, Bel

I like it. A lot. Sorry this is short. Just wanted to say that. I certainly will facebook you. Keep Writing, Bel

Just so you all know, I wrote this while I was half-asleep and just found out I was moving. Again. I'm just going to point out that most of us ...

Thanks!

thanks! I accidentally do that sometimes. :) Thanks for bringing that to my attention!

I like it! Write a part 4 please!!! Please please please write a part 4 soon! It's a good twist in the plot. I need to read more! Keep Writing, ...

I like how you changed it, It makes it better to have another person telling the story. It's easier to relate to. Keep Writing, Bel