BelarusBirdy

Title idea: I should have listened or I should have walked away This is really good work, young one :P lol my weirdness is apparent Keep writing poetry. I have ...

I'm shivering right now. That is truly amazing work tally-wa! You've improved since last we met...I need to train my mind... lol I had a ninja moment there. This is ...

In some places, you can add contractions. The verb tense is a little varied here and there, and it's kind of confusing. Sorry, I'm a little OCD about that kind ...

This is truly art. It's what narrative poetry is about- telling a story and leaving people with enough unanswered questions to read it again. The constancy of the rhyme scheme ...

pretty good, but a bit cliche. (Sorry, I'm not trying to be a jerk.) One thing you need to think about is making all the "paranormal junk" different from the ...

I'm new here too! Yay for new people! anyways, on the subject of the poem, I thought it was really good. It has good flow and a sense of finality ...

I really like this and I can relate to it so well. Not to be mean, but now I just want to say that the flow of the poem could ...

I love the idea of making them Fae. It adds a twist on the idea of the arranged marriage. I thought it was pretty well written, with a few mistakes ...

I can relate to this, sort of. I think along those lines a lot :) and I encourage you not to give up the more...abstract view of the world. It ...

I love this!!!!!! Fellow fan of both painting and writing...how amazing!!! :) I think your poem is beautiful. It's how I feel about painting, too. Keep writing!!!

I like the meaning it has, not completely abstract, but not just there, no heart-on-the-sleeve type of emotion. It comes from a source of pain, and I respect and relate ...

I love the detail and the words you used!! Great job of description! I loved that it's different. Not everyone can write about something so common and routine as seeing ...