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When all the stars were gone, then there would be no more light, and they would reign forever. I would take out that middle part, and just have it: When ...

It reminds me of what a scientist would dream, perhaps lacking the poetic finesse in waking life. It's a beautiful viewpoint; admiring the complexities of design in the universe. I ...

This is well done because it makes me want a cigarette too. But maybe not one as personal as this. I'd hate to get attached to something and give it ...

It's awesome if you're a linguist. He mixes a lot of different langauges together in the same sentences, constantly making quips and puns that I'm sure he was the only ...

Hey, this is fantastic. One of the best Science fiction stories I've read on here. Good looking out. The only thing I can say is to flesh out the background ...

with sparkling sands coloured grey, a storm of cortex of desires and beliefs. Nice brain landscape image here. Sometimes, you have to take a chance Indeed, if all of reality ...

This reminds me a lot of stuff I wrote in higschool, but better. By the way, in mentioning the symptoms of the disease of man you forgot to mention hyper ...

Hey, I really liked the theme of this. It's reminiscent of the archetype put forth in Autumn of the Patriarch by Gabriel Garcia Marquez. Actually my kind of poem; I'm ...

She watched the rise and fall of his chest, measuring time in the increments made by his steady breaths. Nice description there. Here's some typos you missed: Even though nobody ...

Hi, prepare to be reviewed until you walk funny. I'm terrible at this, so instead of actively looking for flaws I'm going to grab all the stuff that sounds cool ...

Hi there. Welcome to my review, which will probably end up being less than helpful. But hey, I'm committed. :) First of all, it looks like you've got a decent ...

One of the better things I have ever read on this site. Excellent, excellent stuff. The title caught my eye immediately and the story that followed did not betray my ...

I like it. It's vague enough to keep me coming back to know what the heck all this stuff is about. Other than that I have no great changes I ...

There was fire in the heavens. Excellent opening sentence. Can't really say anything more about it because it speaks volumes for itself, I would say. Excuse me while I nitpick ...

In contrast to the complaint on the lack of savagery and chaos one would expect from a plain crash, I rather enjoyed the serenity of the images in this. also, ...