BamickAZ

:) Very good job. I really liked it and I could see it used as a story a character tells within a longer story. It seems like it's dialogue from ...

Or at the end you could put, "Please think of me and be wise" Althought that might sound a little wordy once you put it in. But check it out, ...

Hhhmm…where to start? Well, first of all, the story was really good in its overall aspects. The movements in the story were easy to follow and interesting. For such a ...

I actually haven't read the whole poem yet, but I read the title and I just started laughing. It reminds me of that line from "American Pie," the song. "The ...

Sentence 1: Good. Sentence 2: What the heck are you talking about? What are you describing with “blue guardianship just below the ceiling?” It is not clear enough. Sentence 3: ...

LET MY PEOPLE STAY There is a place on the Mediteranean where I learned to walk, run and ride where I experienced love, loss and life => Awesome, good flow, ...

Hi, I read your poem "Monsoon" and I came up with some suggestions for how you could improve it, but remember these are just suggestions and my opinions. First of ...

Your style of writing is really good and captivating, however there are places where you could polish your technique. I actually don't have time to critique your story more thoroughly ...