AspiringAuthorA..M.

So, is there a continuation? :?

Only the humans of reality talk for no reason. :wink: This story is reality. :( That is why it is under non-fiction. My sentences are bland :smt010 :?:

I took out the television and movie player details, as you suggested that they were unnecessarily added. :P - :smt059

Thanks. *Sigh*

I’m not just asking you; anyone! Can anyone tell me? And don’t give me crap and bullshit like, “If things didn’t change, we wouldn’t grow,” or “Things can’t get better ...

Didn't we all? Sorry if I sounded mean in my review of your work. Life hasn't been nice to me, plus I was feeling rather drowsy at the time that ...

If you know anything about writing movies at all, you would know that the plot, no matter how cheesy or overused it has been, you can still make it good ...

Post the next part and I will look into it. :wink:

Aliens and Monster? Will review tomorrow. Maybe. :smt015

Juniper wrote: I might be a little more or less biased, but I don't like shimmer/glimmer for description because they're too overused. Why not use a more original adjective-verb to ...

Well that made me sad.

PenNPaper wrote: You had some info dumps that were unnecessary though. Hope you get what I mean. Are you referring to what Hippie above said? Hm, he has the most ...

I think thsi story does need a review. Will get to it eventually despite you saying it's not necessary. :wink:

That is exactly the type of emotion I wanted to convey. :P Now I just need the other chapters of my book to have the same impact. :wink:

Glad you enjoyed it. :wink: -By the way the dancing elephants terrify me. *Looks around nervously* :roll: "Oh shot! It's a dust bunny!"