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Re: That's So Gay!
Generally, I liked it. It takes a social issue and brings it directly to the foreground, with effective short lines and stanzas. However, there were a few parts that I ...
Dec 3, 2011 -
Re: Atlantis - Prologue
That was good. A few things: The first section was difficult to understand because of the characters' unnamedness. Actually, you did mention one: Garry, and I think you should take ...
Oct 23, 2011 -
Re: Deleted 20
Graverobber, the sky is ashen, dead-weighted with amber flakes, silver-- like the tongue they pried from your teeth , It seems odd to call her Graverobber, and then reference her ...
Oct 21, 2011
