Ardor

Aww that is so sweet. This is a really nice short story. I find no complaints- as far as I can tell you are on the right track. You know ...

Well that's nice. I like the flow you have with this poem. I have a question: what is this poem actually about? To me personally, while it shows off your ...

Only 3 posts? Just 3? And you've managed to only keep me itrigued but to become a fan of your style? Man you can write good for a newb! Well, ...

This story makes me HORNY! Just kidding. It is an ok first chapter. I like the way you have used dialogue in this chapter. However, to improve I would say ...

This is beautiful! This is an excellent poem, which lives up to it's name. It is, to me, a poem chronicling the effects of lust on the individual, and you ...

Awesome flow you got going on. You have very original ideas. I can understand this poem very well. In fact I have Aspergers Syndrome. In short, I often feel like ...

I just love the simplicity of the last line. Overall you have quite a gem for a poem. I love tha flow of the piece, and how not every line ...

Well that's really nice. There's nothing quite like expressing your love for someone in a poem. You have used a lot of metaphors and very special moments where you make ...

This is a good entry for the contest, though you have missed out one word out, but really that's for picky people. It was good for a fantasy. All the ...

I agree, the ending is missing some sot of relief maybe, something to sign off with. But it doesn't matter! You are a very talented person. This wouldn't be good ...

Oh yes oh yes oh yes oh yes oh yes oh yes oh yes oh yes oh yes oh yes oh yes oh yes oh yes. This is awesome. You ...

I am English too. Yay! Anyway, this is a good start. It does everything a prologue should: introduces whatever is going on, builds up tthe first few chapters and has ...

The last paragraph has a weird structure. I think you need to edit this piece a bit- there are certain parts which don't really flow that great. However, with those ...

I concur this. I am dead serious. This is great. This is fantastic. This is- fantabulous. I know it's a made up word but who cares?! These 4 essays are ...

This is what is missing nowadays: a poem which can also read as a story. It has varied sentence structures for effect, a very nice use of symbolism and is, ...