Ardor

I really like this piece. It was very clear and was very rich in subtlety. I especially liked how you used that sense of a world gone mad. This is ...

Hi there! I liked the idea behind it: that idea that people aren't what they seem. However I do think you need to edit a few parts that I found ...

Yeah I personally thought what the policeman said was a tad bit unrealistic, but I loved your use of dialogue. I am also a big fan of your style. You ...

No, you're it! :) Just joking. Anyway, I thought it was great. I like how you developed your characters- at first I found Valarie a bit confusing- throughout your novel. ...

I really like this. You must have a very colourful personality. Yeah, the rhyming was a bit off, but it doesn't really matter. If you are writing about yourself then ...

This was creepy. I liked the way you built the tension up until the last paragraph. Structure's good, you have a way of describing certain characters which I love. For ...

I admire your honesty. This is a very, very personal piece. A lot of people can relate to this on such a level that they can hold it to their ...

Aww this is really nice. Exuse the 'Aww', I'm a guy with feelings :) Great poem. I would suggest you expand it, it has great potential to be an extended ...

I thought it was too long. I found the first couple paragraphs lacking the pace you would expect in a first chapter. I feel that at the end the pace ...

*two hour standing ovation* Wow. Just wow. Wow. Just wow. Wow. Just wow. Wow. Just wow. Wow. Just wow. Wow. Just wow. Wow. Just wow. I'm just going to do ...

Hmm. Interesting. Very interesting. I'm not so fond on the title, personally speaking. I don't think it fits the style of writing. It seems too cliched in my honest opinion. ...

This is great! I'd love to see it developed in the future. I like your structure. Shouldn't it be "from that day on" instead of "from that they on"? But ...

This has been awesome so far. I think Browning is an awesome character, and steals the show altogether. I love your chracters- they are so imaginative and perfect for action. ...

This was great, as per usual. But, I have to say, I find Drew a bit of whiny bitch. I don't know why but I hate him. At the moment, ...

I ROFL'd at the end paragraph. It was great. I loved it. I love how you make the characters very true to life. I foudn it very humouress, and I'm ...