Arctaire

As always, your reviews are incredibly helpful. Along with always making me want to write more. So i guess I'm going to start Chapter 2 tonight now :P Commas have ...

Well thank you! I feel honored and am glad you enjoyed everything so far. I'm going to try and finish chapter 1 soon, and hopefully the rest will be to ...

Once again, your thoroughness is amazing. This wasn't my most heavily edited piece so I knew there would be a good amount of mistakes. I'm going to go through and ...

Usually I am overzealous with commas... guess that is starting to fade. lol I kind of rushed this part so I didn't do crazy amounts of editing, so I'll blame ...

Thank you :) And yeah, people have been very thorough and it's amazing and super helpful. I have ideas for, what I think is, a good story arc. But I'll ...

Thank you so much for your comments :) They are definitely helping me learn, and making me think more about my word choices and phrasing. and I will be changing ...

I put up part 1.1, which is pretty much a lot of explaining what happened in this one, but doesn't give away all the secret stuff to come. Mostly it ...

You're welcome :) Knowing that help clears it up, and you get that vibe, but It might not be too clear. Knowing that, it all makes sense though. Definitely gives ...

I'm really new.... so I don't know how, but I'll do my best! I'm hoping the rest is good too, I'm into some dialog now and I feel like that's ...

Thank you so much for this, really made my day and to want to get back to finishing this chapter. I like to describe stuff, apparently too much. I'll look ...

Yea, I need to figure out a new way to describe him, at least till the full end of the chapter. He doesn't have a name ... yet (I know ...

Thanks :) This made my night. I totally understand the choppiness and all that. This is my first attempt at writing pretty much anything, so it's bound to have bumps ...

Thanks, and yea this is a very rough start that I'm going to expand upon everything and explain all the weird things I made up for a setting. And I ...

I'm the same way, just figured it was something you missed and decided to point it out. I think I do it a lot when I'm typing really fast and ...

Website double posted... :/ Deleted the double.