Archangel

Your turn buddy. Character Filianna seems to have a lot of pride in her father but, although she has respect for him see also doesn't think he's made the right ...

OMG!! That was so sweet!! You wrote this really well. I would have put it under realistic, fiction as well as romance if the system let us. BTW, in the ...

Okay, Wait. Is the person who's telling the story female as well? In that case, the term would be lesbian. Gay=guy+guy. Lesbian=girl+girl. There is a clear difference. You need to ...

Nice story but, you have some things you can fix. 1. In the first paragraph, "It was all a dream just a dream." You missed a comma. If you put ...

Nice job but you have room to improve. One, I would elaborate more. Give a little context about what happened before the kiss. What was going on, what had driven ...

Talk about misleading the audience! Surprisingly I enjoyed it. You had great sentence structure and accomplished one of my greatest pet peeves. You had wonderful detail and description. I loved ...

Oh my goodness! That was adorable! If that had been geek lore I can see how Atlas became so cold if she was meant to die. Anyway, you need to ...

'I'm fine.' Whenever that phrase slips out of someone's lips the exact opposite is the truth. Again, another great piece written with emotion intertwined with it. This piece and the ...

Did you write this from your own feelings? If so I know how you feel. Partly because that's what today was like and also because the emotion was in there ...