Archae

*Reads twice* Hmm... :? Interesting start, at that point. It does give an idea of the structure of the story, ect, and I instantly knew what it was going to ...

Weird stuff... not that weird is bad! Weird is good! Just a couple of points I could think of... The boy was maybe four or five. He didn’t look like ...

Wow... that was... chilling! Still, chilling is good, and I like good, so I liked this. I didn't really understand it... But I guess you'll follow up with an explanation ...

Heheh, that was... pretty freaky! I liked! I good dark, sinister story that really makes you shiver on the inside is always loved. This was one of those. I didn't ...

Hmm... May I make one, simple, perfectly normal suggestion? Paragraphs my friend! And thus, I am done... :roll: Arch xxx

Wow... that was pretty deep stuff! It felt like one, huge metaphor (Not the right word, but I can't think of another one...) or something. I can only think of ...

Well that was interesting. Reminded me of Dragonheart... I have no idea why. :? Funky plot! So anyway, the story was well written enough, couple of grammer mistakes here and ...

Nicely done! I loved the general plot... made me shiver - that'll teach us to walk down dark alleyways at night. More maybe? :shock: Don't leave us hanging! I want ...

Heh, just what I was thinking, a run-away nine-year old wouldn't last the night! :wink: Anywho, I thought it was pretty good. Nice plot; I got a real firm image ...

Hmm.. Well I read it twice over, that should be enough! :) Your plot was interesting enough. A set of parents abandoning their children, and leaving them in the hands ...

Heheh, you know what they say! Curiousity killed the cat... although in this case, we will never know! :cry: I liked it. The dialogue made me snigger, as well as ...