Anonamuse

Okay, well right off let me say that it's good, but could use a once over. I found a lot of grammatical errors, where I couldn't exactlly tell you...I wasn't ...

The HP series is one that I can't pick up and read again, alone with all the Twilight books. I'm sorry, but I can't pick them up again, my brain ...

I had a lot of trouble figuring out how your verses related to the moonlight. They don't seem to have any contection what so ever. Not to mention a lack ...

I had a little trouble figuring out what it was about. Your rhym was a little weird as well, it seemed to move slow. You’re like the ruby amongst crystals, ...

I liked the way you created the scene, but like said above repeating the last line is a bit over bearing, but otherwise it does add a good feel to ...

Your poem seemed to be a bit forced, and like stated before, repeating "sitting in a sea of people" does get slightly annoying after a while, but otherwise I thought ...

All I can say is wow. Like almost everyone else said, and I agree with them, the first thing that I thought about was marriage, but holy cow I was ...

The caps was a bit over doing it. But over all, it was really good, a teen struggling to understand what happened to friend that was close. Hits home you ...

When I first saw this I thought about the millitary, but as I read it I realized that you gave it a new meaning. I really like the lyrics, but ...

I could really connect with your piece. But as stated earlier, your use of 'he' and 'they' confused me for a while. Is 'they' the group of teens or the ...