AmirTheAwesome1

And i re-wrote it, Thank you very much, it really means a lot to me.

Thanks, i actually noticed the sister/brother thing a bit too late. But thanks, this is the reason i write here so people can criticize my writings and show where i ...

Thanks, i actually noticed the sister/brother thing a bit too late. But thanks, this is the reason i write here so people can criticize my writings and show where i ...

Thanks, this was actually written by me about a year ago i've learned a lot since then, but i wanted to seek help when it comes to grammar as knowing ...

That was pretty helpful, first of all thanks for the your opinion in what i wrote, second thanks for the notes and advises i'll surely be working on both the ...

Thanks the commas seem to be a major problem with me, English isn't my first language, so thanks its good to know what i need to focus on, grammar and ...