AmethystNight

This is a lovely poem, very sweet with genuine emotion. Your syntax is great, which is always important in poetry, and, in some places, has a slight oldfashioned style to ...

So, firstly, I am loving this character, which is probably quite bad considering she is rather evil, but that just shows how well written she is. I am very intrigued ...

Hi, I like the story, an interesting idea and you give a good idea of what the main character's like right away. There are a few technical things that could ...

Ok, so I have been reading each of the installations for this and I have to say I love this story. Ivory is a great character, very believable, sassy and ...

I like this a lot. It's very clever and highly amusing. You're writing is great and this piece really shows off your descriptive skills. complaining silently that the sign should, ...

Firstly, I love that you haven't given speakers for the speech at the beginning - it really creates an air of mystery. I also like how you concentrate on describing ...

Overall, I really enjoyed this piece. I like how you started it, not revealing what the boy was running from. This helped to build the tension. However, I felt that ...

Firstly, WOW! I'm hooked. I love the idea so far for this story and the characters that you're building up have already started to interest me. Also, I love their ...

I think this is a great start and, from what I've read so far, I would like to read more of this story. I think you have developed the main ...

I love the idea for this story and the way you explore the dream. You're description is brilliant, and I got a clear image of the world you were creating. ...