AlyTheBookworm

Amazing- my favorite chapter so far. Can't wait to read the next one! :D

Hey Jyva! Your nitpicks were very helpful, and most of them have never been pointed out to me before. Also, "nearly suffered aneurysms" really cracked me up. Thanks so much ...

Thanks so much neptune! :) I agree, I think I'll go back and write more details about Ryn herself. She's two or three years older than her sister. Also, I ...

Thanks for the review Shadow! The points you made are super helpful, and I don't think I'd have noticed these problems otherwise. Also, congrats on your 600th review :)

Thanks for the review Shikora! :)

Thanks for the review, Raven! :)

Thanks for the comment Fanta! :) (Btw, welcome to YWS! I hope you like it here)

Thanks for the review :) I do have to work on being more concise, definitely!

Thanks for the review Zoom! Yeah, I'm actually not a fan of the word oblong either. I was using the description of Not-A-Block from the game this short is based ...

I love it. Bedsheets are like black holes, and my whole body is sore, and I look into the mirror over and over again hoping what I see will change ...

Thanks for the review, Eros! :)

Thanks so much! Glad you liked it. :D

Haha thanks Jade- glad you like it! (not glad you relate tho ;-;) Thanks for pointing out the rhyming in the last stanza. If I ever pick this up again ...

Thanks for the review. :)

Glad it helps! :D