Aley

I find that the hardest thing with metaphor is getting too deep into them. You have to allow the metaphor to form the idea instead of forcing the idea into ...

What can I say? I was planning to be an engineer.

Hey! A couple things to keep in mind when reading this story since you've reviewed it twice: This is the second part of one chapter, and not the last part ...

While punctuation is pretty free, same with capitalization and grammar in general, there are some stipulations that make it possible to be incorrect or correct, and that is the punctuation ...

^^ You can see them now. If you want to change your review, or add to it feel free. I'd like to know if you think the edits added any ...

The reason I used the semi-colon is because I wanted it to still be connected as one idea. The idea doesn't stop at just two girls standing there, but the ...

Hey Aurora, I did read your note, and that's why I suggested you take a step back from it as a method to distance yourself from "this is me" and ...

Hey IcyFlame, Thank you for the review. I am going to keep my exclamation point for a couple reasons. The main one is that I don't mind that part feeling ...

I wanted to write a poem about victim complex.

Yeah, I think it helped connect the idea to have god as not being involved in ugly places explained for the reader, but I think you having "despair is stagnancy" ...

I think in terms of how to show that there never was a father here, you could show images of the house struggling where a dad would fit into the ...

Hey Temp-Love, just going to point out you have some broken codes in this review near the top. Two of them are bold codes that are broken. One you put ...

Quick comment, this is not a review. I just wanted to say I really like what you're doing here with the declarative first person, but it feels a bit weak ...

>3 If you're going to give me just a 30% out of 100% on something, perhaps you could tell me how to improve it?

Thank you for catching the errors