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Hey again, You're trying too hard

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Hey Tuesday! Last one =O So this is a good poem. I like what you're doing here. You've got a very open communication with the audience which is reflected by ...

Hey Tuesday, Another notice about repetitive words~ "Where the leaves fall,/Where the snow falls lightly on kids noses." Also about this, you need "Kids'" because it is plural, kids, and ...

Hey Tuesday! So this one really shows a problem with punctuation. I'm going to focus my review there. Mostly, you've got too much of it. If you keep all of ...

Hey Tue, This is familiar XD So after a cold read, meaning after a while since we worked on making this, I think this turned out pretty nice. You should ...

Hey Tue, So this poem was rather underwhelming after the last one I reviewed. I think the rhyming really messed with the flow of the poem and the refrain is ...

Hey Tuesday, So overall I think you wrote a very linear poem. I wish you had done more with it. You've got a good sense of idea about what you ...

Hey I like this poem. It's cute. I think the way that you wrote it started to sound sort of preachy when you got to the middle stanza, but when ...

Hey Hatt! Three out of five? Cute. I think that this would be better if it was written with less of the swooshing going on actually and with more content. ...

Hello! I am here to review the next thing on your list! This is not a haiku, but I shall review it as a poem! I think simple is weird ...

Hey Hatt, Have more confidence in yourself. You need to work on getting the capitalization and punctuation right for the poems, but overall you've got a good word flow and ...

Hey Merg! So glad to see you're posting things still. After reading two of your poems I think I know the perfect place to introduce you to things. The Knowledge ...

Yesssss ]. I like to use dashes, commas, or space to indicate a pause in the reading. Dashes would work wonderfully there and I think you did a good job ...

Hey, Cute. I don't like the rhyming. I think it's overblown and you could have at least done better with the line breaks. You can do better than this. Sure ...