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Re: The Fire Princess - Part One - Arinalgar - Chapter One (Second Revision)
I read some of it, and it is an amazing piece of writing, but I couldn't quite follow it, and it didn't quite capture me. I think something very important ...
Mar 31, 2012 -
Re: The protectors of the elements (improved version)
It isn't bad so far. But, to improve it, you shouldn't make your main character agree to go with them right away. She should be more shocked and looking for ...
Mar 31, 2012 -
Re: The Messengers- Chapter 1
It is quite good so far. I like the mystery to it. I have no idea what's going on, and that's how I like it ;). You also have a ...
Mar 31, 2012