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She lay pale and covered in sweat that reflected the candlelight dancing along the walls. Her dirty, blonde hair surrounded her in damp locks. Her eyelids fluttered tiredly. Her mouth ...

I really like the imagery in this :O I thought this was going to be some sappy romance prologue but it was actually kinda cool :O the whole action/tension type ...

This story is actually amazing! :O I've been hooked on it since the first chapter xD I love the way this whole story has developed. The first part was so ...

Hey dude :D This piece is really enjoyable :D I like the whole plotline and the way it ends at the end, it would really make you want to read ...

This is so unique :D :D I like it :D I love the whole thing about Olivia being some haunted pretty girl with some terrible, scary baggage where she's being ...

Heyy Your story is well writen :) Everything is described in this prologue and in some ways you two have managed to describe everyone and their situation in just this ...

The whole day I felt everything, everything she was feeling. I felt her curiosity and excitement as we watched the soldiers training in air combat. Her happiness when a small ...

I realyyy still like this :D :D It's so original and definitely different then the usual fairy stories that are out this year. Your characters are so original and there's ...

I like this :D Everything is so vivid and you wrote it in such a way that you can imagine every scene and live it :L The only problem were ...

I love this :D The descriptions are perfect, it's like I can picture everything that goes on. The opening is fantastic, it drags the reader in and completely sets the ...

Hey sorry for the late review :) I was kinda busy buuuttt Im here now so let's get cracking!! :D Well first things first, Yes I like where this is ...

Hey...I like the idea, sounds good and interesting. So I'm interested in how you develop it :) Well you don't have issues in grammar, that I'm aware of, but there ...

Intrigued. This is a good chapter and I like the characterization :) the only problem is, in the first paragraph of the first chapter Don was talking about Religion class ...

Hey honey :P Well thank you for your awesome reviews so I'm going to review you back :D Well first thing's first...red is the correction.blue is grammar correction. A street ...

haha this is cute :D I LOVE the lyrics :D :D they capture emotion and of course the fact that they're funny makes it appealing. It sucks the way you ...