Aiva

Blast, I'm not a poetry critic either, but I must say that that was extremely beautiful. You have a really nice gift. :) And though in childhood we oft times ...

I think it's pretty cool! If you read it over again, you'll catch all of the grammar and spelling mistakes, but all in all, it's a good start. It is ...

:smt010 It's so sad. Like Gyr said, you're a very sophisticated writer, and I enjoyed this piece a lot. Just like everyone else said, it's a bit redundant at parts, ...

This is a cool song! It puts a whole new meaning to MIA! But I don’t, no – And that needs to change! [quote] I read that, and thought the ...

That's interesting. It's got a nice ring to it. In the drafting stage, I'd say you're pretty well off. It's got some great potential. Maybe try changing some lines around. ...

I like it as a blurb, and as you suggested, as a signature. but as a poem, it'd be cool to see it expanded into a longer one, to see ...

Interesting. There were several grammatical and spelling mistakes. Punctuation, like commas, were left out and it almost made the story a bit hard to follow. Things were also repeated a ...

Wow, you did a tremendous job. There were a couple of things I noticed, but the other critiquers already said them. I'm a complete fan of vampires, and I think ...

Hey, I actually really like it. But, like everyone else is saying, the story is a bit hard to follow, but only because the punctuation was a bit off. But, ...

“Dentist,” he mumbled, his eyes flickering over me. I squashed an irrepressible urge to shout “Boo!” I love that! I actually really like this. So far, nothing to critique but ...