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I am a little scared Lily, lol, but thanks :-) Thanks also TL G-Wooster, for the warning. The day I become like Paolini... I will shoot myself :P Anyway, I ...

Ye, I understand where you are coming from. I would never insult his fans, I mean, they can enjoy what they want. It's the writer that ticks me off :twisted:

Nah, see that's too original. More like... Sauron, no wait, Nauros, or maybe over Varth Dader, who is actually Eragon's Dad!

Can any of his fans see the resemblance between Paolini, Tolkien and Lucas? I made a list the other day, but really can't be bothered to go through them again ...

Thanks both of you - those reviews were very helpful. I don't really know where this is going myself yet, so thanks for the advice :-) -Mark EDIT: I have ...

Wow thanks very much scasha! Great suggestions - I always have troubles with the first few lines :-) I would agree with you on those things, but at the time ...

Here is my review in MS word 2003 format, if you can't read it, let me know. -Mark

I am sorry but this is too much - space out the paragraphs and maybe post it in two parts. Also, YWS asks you to do at least two reviews ...

Cover Hey! I said I would get to it, and I did! This took a while, so it may take time for the next part. I really enjoyed it, well ...

- You used 'yea' a few times. I realize every character has their own voice, but this seems too modern. In medieval times, yea was an informal way of saying ...

So... you didnt like it? O well, I will keep rewriting this, until I get it spot on. I didn't like the first bit to be honest, I might expand ...

I think you clicked the wrong button - you made a new topic. Ask a mod to lock it, topics are only for works. Anyhow... -Mark

Does anybody genuinly know what people see in his rubbish?

Thank you for all the reviews. I didn't like this really, it was just testing about really. Thanks, -Mark

Thanks very much Flame!