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This is really good Kalliope. For a moment I had forgotten what forum I was on, but after reading the first lin I instantly knew it was romance. I like ...

cool names! 'Flora, Fauna and Felicia' :-D everything, apart from Flight class OK, i, as a reader, don't know what flight class is. You do, but I don't. Try a ...

There really isn't a lot to say. I can't see any obvious grammar issues :-D well done! I liked your plot, and the suspense was great! How do you do ...

I disliked the first sentence: 'I was in the darkness again.' It just sounds a bit flat and boring for a first line. How about 'Darkness enveloped me once more' ...

Hi there! Su smiled faintly at the memory, though the memory was merely a flicker on the screen of her mind. Repetition of 'memory' wrecks the feel. Try rewriting this ...

Hey! I haven't time for along crit, but here goes: Imagine this. Me, aged twenty four, ten years from now. I can't, because I dont't know you. That was the ...

This is very good, but would your teacher be pleased that put shit in the first paragraph: :-D lol, anyhow, this is very well written, I'm sure you will get ...

I like the idea to this. What is this going to be? Romance? Horror? Action? OOO! It's just like xmas! I am very intrigued by this, but maybe instead of ...

Cool vampire story! I realy liked your stron sentence structures, fast pacing and generally everything else! I though this was a fun, interesting story. Actually, I feel a it guilty ...

This is an excellent story you have going on here. I really liked the way you subtely introduced the charactesrs and stroyline, I didn't feel as if I was being ...

Its a strange plot, werewolves vs romans. Could you make it work? The troube is, these days wolves are the only fantasy animal around. They are great, but perhaps, not ...

Yup, this has definatley been summed up... mostly Elegant, majestic, exciting, emotive... I just love your style, its the type all great writers aspire to be like. Of course, this ...

Let it bleed... sounds like the beatles... Let it Be. Lol, anyhow... Many bad authors believe that a good novel is just a million adjectives per sentence. No. I t ...

Wow BBB! When I read this, I was amazed at how well you managed to capture my attention! Usually, online I just can't sit reading from my computer screen, but ...

I really liked your use of description, excellent grammar and the dialogue. Yu prsented us with a very intersting an fun story read, well done! I liked the use of ...