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I hate you, wookie. What did you do to Jacob? :evil: I'm going to try to zoom through this critique, so I can get onto the next chapter, but we ...

Yo, wookie! Wazzup? I really enjoyed this chapter. It kind of showed that, while Hail doesn't particularly enjoy stealing, she's got a bit of a cavalier attitude about it, since ...

Hola! I haven't been on YWS since the beginning of the summer; it feels good to be back. I immediately noticed your post, since my brother is writing a college ...

Whoa damn, Wren! I really didn't expect that. You just stabbed a seventy-odd-year-old man, girl! Great. Now I'm talking to characters from books. Just brilliant. I took stock of the ...

Wow... This story was freaking awesome. I read through the two chapters before this, as well, and it really dragged me in from the start. There were some things that ...

Hey, wookie! Wazzup? First off, I just want to say that this chapter was pretty cool. There were two things that really stood out to me: Hail's pants catching on ...

May I say this for the, oh, twelve hundredth time? YOU ARE FREAKING AWESOME, KJ. I loved this chapter because, once again, you got in touch with real human emotions. ...

Welcome to YWS, Bree! I really like where you're going with your story so far; it sounds pretty cool. Gaia, Anemos, and Deilos seem nice, and Kapnos seems pretty badass. ...

Even if I had just gotten out of my month-long writer's block, I wish like hell that I had just screwed over my story and read this the moment you ...

For some reason, whenever I come back onto this site after a while away, I always end up reading your story, Ash. I've only been away for about two weeks ...

There are no words to describe the pure awesomeness of this story. Straight to critiquing: There has to be some kind of mistake, I thought wildly. That was probably a ...

Hey, wookielover17! Thanks for the PM; I probably wouldn't have realized that this was up here if you hadn't told me. Now both Hail and Jake can make things explode ...

... Holy shit! Wow, Cap'n. This story was... incredible. There weren't too many grammatical issues in your writing. I'm just going to point out a few things I noticed, whether ...

Hola, purplepastelpretty, mi amiga, que tal? Er... sorry. I laspe into Spanish a lot. It looks like you've got a good idea for a children's book here. I'm just thinking... ...

Hi! I just want to start off by saying that I thought your story was very interesting. The whole thing about Jake and Hail running away from the orphanage and ...