AWritersFantasy

Quote: “You do realize how vulnerable I am down there,” Lucretia said. Missed some words. Also, is this a question or what? It's kind of a fake-out sentence - half ...

First thing I noticed, if ya wanna emphasise something, never ever, put it all in caps. It looks untidy and unprofessional. Actually, I never meant to emphasize the word "stone," ...

Hey, I was planning on critiquing this for you but it hurts my eyes too much. Why don't you change the font, then perhaps more people will review. If you ...

We don't know where she is. Is she in a forest? In the mountains? What does her house look like? What's the weather outside? Does she have a garden? See ...

Why not bring them into the next few chapters, so we can get to know them personally without being thrown into a deep info dump like this? No one is ...

I would genuinlu say that this is one of my stories on the site so far. I really enjoyed reading it, mostly because this is the type of book I ...

Hello, Originally it was the next installation that I wanted to critique, but I though that perhaps I should start from this, yes? Also, as was asked, I ignored the ...

well, this was pretty good, I loved the ending. It was a total surprise when they ended up going to the moon. Caught me off guard! That's a very good ...

I thought I had posted the updated version of the prologue, but apparently not, so you can basically ignore the first post in this thread. [pre] Child of Ashes: Outcast ...

I thought I had posted the updated version of the prologue, but apparently not, so you can basically ignore the first post in this thread. [pre] Child of Ashes: Outcast ...

I think what your friend did is basically what I'm trying to do, but I'm not sure if what I've written is really heading in that direction. I think what ...

I was using the italics as an example. It's something that's done in the book Assassin's Apprentice. I was never planning on putting this part of the story in italics. ...

Section three [pre] ****** It was nightfall when Kaliyah saw the figures of her two brothers walking towards where she and Weaver had been waiting for a few hours now. ...

Section two Please see author notes in the first post [pre] ***** The following day, Kaliyah and Weaver set off away from the cabin and toward Deirril, where Kaldar’s barracks ...

I suppose I could, but I tend to forget to add on the next sections when I break it down. I did that at my message board with chapter two ...