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dont worry it didnt and i'll edit it later cause im publishing the first chapter right now. :D

Okay i finished readining it not grown up, im not married yet, and i dont have kids...but somthing i thought you could improve on would be the establishment because i ...

ok sorry it was my first try ill try and edit it...when i get time :oops:

ok i haven't read it yet but i have 2 computer classes im ahead of my work in so I HAVE TIME!

to try to better incorporate the POV change you were worried about you could use a narrator at the beginning and end maybe the person who was killed or the ...

i only had time to get about a fourth of the way don (sorry my friend) but a tip i wanna offer is that it doesnt really have much transition ...

one thing that didnt make sense was that the shapeshift but doesnt that just mean the take on another form and NOT their abilities im not sure but if its ...

i loved every single second of reading this it sounded like a professionaly published book. :D

Oh my gosh i loved it i couldnt look away i was liturally on the edge of my seat..but there were a few grammer errors :D

I really enjoyed the additional factor you added with the 7 realms nice job!

Awsome job again cant wait for chapter 4

Awsome chapter i loved it! =)