ASingleDarkRose

I will take your advice on the opening. =) I know it needs a lot of work, and yes, i have read the maximum ride series, and i didn't really ...

I liked this story, but i agree that the beginning was a little choppy and didn't really add to the flow. Keep writing!

actually yes, i have seen that show, that is where i got my inspiration for this writing! Yes, i will try to stay away from that.

I enjoyed reading this piece of work, and the only comment i have on it is that i was confused about who the president was. Was it Hudson or Roberts? ...

Thank you for the tips! I'm going to definitely make this better, and i hope you will review my newer copy when i'm finished with it.

I will make sure i edit this a lot! it obviously needs it. And thanks for the ideas guys! i'm not going to really do anything with this, but i ...

Good! i'll be looking for the next chapter! i love how you explained the family at the restaurant. This chapter made me curious about beth, and i'm hoping she plays ...

I liked this story! I love when there is an antagonist that's portrayed very well, and i think you did that perfectly.

i thought this had very good use of imagery! i enjoyed reading it. Always getting in my way, felt more like a horses tail. i would change the line above ...

my comment was a little confusing, so if you have questions, just pm me.

Aww... this was a very sweet story. i loved the way she sang him to sleep one last time, and in a way this sort of reminds me of cinderella.

this was confusing, but good. What does the teacher mean when she says this is not the mc first time in her class? Other than that i like it! continue! ...