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Re: One Word Will Change A Life (Chapter one)
Hey! Re-read the edited version: great! You fixed those spots where things didn't quite make sense, and the spelling errors. :) You also put a little more into the story, ...
Jun 24, 2011 -
Re: That's Hot.
Haha. ok. I'm very confused on what exactly happened and why he was going on a date with a fire hydrant BUT this piece was pretty good. Good descriptive details ...
Jun 16, 2011 -
Re: Kiss me in the rain, baby.
:) No! You weren't too harsh at all, looking back, I totally understand the mistakes you're pointing out. Thank you for the "harsh" criticism :) After a few more reviews, ...
Jun 16, 2011 -
Re: Kiss me in the rain, baby.
To answer the question, "Why did she go to the hospital?" is this: Whenever the bloody nose came about, and the world was spinning around Grace, she was having a ...
Jun 13, 2011 -
Re: Stop and Stare. (edited)
The last two reviews you guys posted I know there are things in there that are very questionable: why didn't she call an ambulance? and smaller details that I left ...
Feb 5, 2011 -
Re: Stop and Stare. (edited)
Yeah, I see what you're saying. But people can die from beatings. I willl go back though, and make it more gruesome though! thanks for the review Luxy! ---Ash. P.S. ...
Jan 27, 2011 -
Re: Holding Me Back
I could totally see this playing out in an actual book. Well written! Please go back through though, because there were minor word errors, and grammar errors. But I totally ...
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: Stop and Stare. (edited)
If you would like, I will make a sequel to this short story. :) I left little details out for that reason. thanks for noticing! and thank you for the ...
Jan 22, 2011 -
Re: long ago :ancient china prolouge
thank you very much I AM A FULL BLOODED AMERICAN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Oct 4, 2008 -
Re: Vampires before midnight.
Hey guys I'm going to continue!
Jul 11, 2008