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O my god! I loved it! ^_^ It was so sweet and romantic and just about every other romantic thought that I've ever thought in my life! Haha XD. I ...

OK, that was creepy but awesome. It sounded like something Stephen King would write only shorter and less detailed and more understandable. I like how you created intensity out of ...

OK. I'm a total vampire freak so I really like this. I think you should write another one, explaining how the exchange students arrive and such. I can't express how ...

Hey, very nice. I'm sorry I don't know the song that goes with it. But I did kinda get the flow of it. I think you coulf have done a ...

Woo hoo! Good job! OK, but I do want to point some things out to you. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar issues; which is the first time I've ...

Very well written. A few minor spelling and grammar errors but it was still very well written and thought out. Mr. Alverez seemed more like a side character rather than ...

Jon-- Let me start out with saying: you got SKILLS ON YOU. =) like someone else said: " The simplicity of it makes it beautiful." So I'm wondering what the ...

Oh my goodness! "You're not the only one who's nervous." Cliff hanger, I love it! I am uberly-wondering what will happen between them. You could expand more in detail about ...

For the most part it was pretty decent. I'm not in high school so I don't really know how to relate to it, but it will be interesting to see ...

Hey pretty good job. A few minor spelling errors, I want you to read through it and try to find them. Like instead of 'biter' cold when he is entering ...

First off: I have a very proud honor to say that you did wondeful on the rain scene. It was very captivating and romantic and gave me a pretty good ...

OKay. you still have some spelling mistakes but not many actually. I am pROUD!!!!!!BYE now!! :roll: :roll: :roll: :shock: :shock: GOOD STORY!! :) :) :) :) :) :) :)

Ok. I am wondering Why did you write you do not deserve this after every single sentence? How did you come up with the idea to use bugs as your ...