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Wow, this was great! You did a great job introducing your character without over-narrating, if you know what I mean. Just one thing, in the beginning of the story, you ...

I think this was pretty good. I would say, if this is going to be your entire first chapter, you should have more of a dialouge between your main character ...

I have never written a script before, but I think yours is pretty good. Maybe you should expand the dialouge between the three friends in the beginning and crack a ...

That really is amazing. The choppy format of it made me hooked. Also, I like the description and dialouge. I really dont have anything to critique, you did a really ...

Wow, this is really creative, and I don't think that I have much advice to give you. Maybe, if anything, I would have made the italicized lines at the end ...

I loved it! First off, in the third line of the second stanza, did you mean "bowler hat" instead of "blower hat"? Did you write this poem just for the ...