30MarsBars

That's beautiful, it really is :) I disagree with Flame11 on the "My heart aches to, but my head says no" part. It makes perfect sense to me. If you ...

There are a lot of errors in your grammar but I won't pick them out because, after all, songs are meant to be heard, not read :P It's a good ...

Ooh, I likey! There's something quite dark about it; mysterious. It's got a good meter for the most part and I really loved the line "Burying the end once again". ...

I like this lyric, it's deep and has a good meter. One thing I picked up on, though, was the way you say 'Death do/did us apart' - whereas the ...

This lyric has a really good emotional impact, especially in the chorus. Your hook is well placed, too. I didn't quite get a strong sense of rhythm, but I think ...