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Nice. ;) I understood what you were trying to describe, and it's really good. :)

I like it. :) It's not too long, like some other things I've read, and I didn't get bored. It has good grammar, punctuation, etc. It really is a completely ...

Good job, Little Me. ;) You're a good poet after all. :) I liked it, and it was very clear and concise. Keep writing (even poetry). :D

The only error I noticed was in the quote. It said 'weather' in the place of 'whether'. Maybe it was originally written that way, but I didn't know. Other than ...

Okay. This is good. But there's one thing: I don't really feel your pain, until the very end. I'm not much of an expert, but that's just my opinion. Other ...