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Re: Dream-Hunters - Chapter One
Hi, Chaser, Wow, this is a pretty stellar first chapter. I'll focus on your specific inquiries since that's what you asked for. As for imagery, it's very strong. You do ...
Mar 12, 2015 -
Re: Sword Wearing Wanderer, Chapter One: Some Dude With A Sword
Hi, First off, I want to say, I'm a fucking fan of this. I love the references, I love the deep, pervasive sense of sarcasm, I love the obvious metaphors. ...
Feb 6, 2015 -
Re: Another World: Chapter I
Hi, Aredhel :) First off, welcome to YWS! I have a few comments for your piece here. As for the things I found issue with, there wasn't much technically wrong ...
Feb 6, 2015 -
Re: Why the wind howls
Hi, Pompadour! I quite liked this piece. You chose an interesting perspective for your narrator that lends the voice some omnipresence which is very cool. In some places I really ...
Aug 2, 2014 -
Re: How to Make a Girl
Hi, Sleepette! Wow, this is really something. It's incredibly intense, very in your face about how girls are made into the things they become. This resonates with me because I ...
Aug 1, 2014