*Twilight*

Well, I guess maybe in the morning early in the morning.

The prolouge dosen't really give any information...none at all. I guess I'll have to wait untill you post the first chapter to crit anything.....

Yes, if you want your story to to really get a reader's attention try including more than just one paragraph.

This is a pretty good plot but like everybody said it needs some editing and revising. Remember always capatalize an "I" when it is by itself. Also remember to put ...

Yes creativity is always important but, grammar and spelling is also crutial to a good story. The plot is good but, it seems like you have many stories posted already. ...

Like almost everybody else said: WOW! This is really good. It's a fast paced poem and it's pretty deep too. This must mean you look at life from a pretty ...

Thanks for the advice. This will really help out because I have read it over and over and it felt kind of hollow in a way. It does lack in ...

Heh I agree Matt Bellamy it is an interesting Idea. Like I said about your poem: Batteries I like poems if they are unique and creative and this was one ...

This poem was...different but in a good way. I don't really like mushy love poems and some are just too deep and emotional to me but this one states the ...

Then get writing cause I'm bored and I want to read something...(No pressure)

Since everyone has already nit-picked at the grammar I will simply comment. This is a type of story I haven't read in a while I'm normally reading about dragons and ...

Good description and no spelling mistakes that I can see. I have to say this is pretty good. It's confusing but thats only because of the short start. I'll be ...

Ah, now the fantasy plot is unfolding. I've been waiting for this for a while. I almost thought you gave up on the story. You have gotten me hooked I ...

The black rose was right it was perfect in description giving it a very depressing feel. Forgive me of my ignorance but, is this going to be continued?

erggg I wish I had spell check. There is a spell check feature in this forum. You can use that.[/b]