🎂Faery007
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Why must I always be in a writing mood when I have the most coursework to do? Oh life. You treat me so cold.
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Thanks for the comment on my poem it was really encouraging! Have anything you want me to look at?
Faery007 You're welcome! Well..I posted a short story named 'only by faith' I have handed it in to my literature teacher but he mentioned it was contradictory. Nobody has mentioned about it being that in the comments, but maybe of you could have a quick look and just tell me if anything doesn't add up? You don't need to review it or anything
I just really want to make it the best it can be! Thank you so much - Hayley.
Nov 3, 2011
snickerdooly Will do!
Nov 3, 2011
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Thank you! <3 For the welcome and the comment about my name wasn't really sure if I liked it, but your right everyone has in one way or another
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It makes me realise how much my writing has changed since I last posted! Awesome..
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Faery007 That's OK, you did I was just so shocked at how many points you have 
Thank you very much for the help though
Jun 10, 2011
Rosendorn No problem!
And my number of points is because I've been on YWS a long time, snapping up points the whole time and hardly giving them away. xD
Jun 10, 2011
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Thank you for critiquing my poem I'm glad that you liked it, and I hope you'll read my others when I post them!
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Hi!
Thanks for the review. I see what you mean with the flow and everything, do you see any more words that sounds un-flow-ish? Because I'm quite biased when it comes to my own work. So, please tell me, if there's any other flaw with it.
Once again, thanks for the review!
Faery007 Helloo! Oooh, how wierd I was just watching Glee
With regards to your poem, I re-read it, and there only words I came across were the following that didn't flow to well -
"gesture" , "exists" should be exist. "lip-glossed" it sounds a little artificial, maybe try going for a more subtle word.
That's pretty much all that needs improving. Just check your words over, to make sure you haven't added extra S's etc
Hope I helped!
HAYLEY
Jun 10, 2011
MiRaCLeS Okay, I'll go back and have a look at those.
You definitely helped Thanks a bunch!
Jun 10, 2011
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Faery007 Thanks Like yours too ;p
Mar 20, 2011
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