So I'm writing a novel thing for this contest. This is the first chapter I don't like the title so if you could find an awesome one, kudos to you!
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Her hands were stuffed into her pockets, head bent but her eyes were alert. She had the perfect face for her line of work. Bland brown eyes, plain brown hair, not too tall, not too short, nothing really special about her. A forgettable face, one you’d expect to see regularly in Manhattan. Regardless of the models and celebrities, there was another 8 million normal people in the Big Apple with boring normal lives and average faces.
She looked across the busy subway pass, people racing by, ignoring her and each other as usual. Her eyes were wide awake, looking for her next target, even though it was only 6:20 in the morning. Well, she was a New Yorker, and a young one at that, barely 17. She finally saw the two perfect targets. Tourists. Not even trying to hide it with the camera hanging off the woman’s neck and the I Love New York shirt the slightly overweight man was wearing. They may as well been saying ‘Mug Me! I’m a Tourist!’.
She strode across the interpass and stood 6-7 feet away from them, a couple of people in between. She glanced up at the black board held up by two thin wires. So they were either going on the N or the W. Wonderful. She wanted to get into Queens, getting tired of the hustle and bustle of Manhattan, even if that same hustle and bustle helped make sure she was never caught. She knew the consequences of being seen but 3 years of experience reassured her that it would never happen. Of course her thin, quick fingers and fast retreat also made juvie hall seem like a story mothers tell their children when they misbehave.
The bright light at the end of the tunnel and the rushing wind grew until finally the train screeched to a stop. The tourists went in first and she followed, letting a couple of people go before her.
The ride was fairly boring, headphones, conversations or cell phones keeping everyone in the train car occupied. She noticed the tourist couple chattering loudly among themselves, a snippet of the conversation reaching her hoodie covered ears. Non-important things, she decided after hearing the lady babble about the Statue of Liberty, how cheap everything was and how nice the pictures were going to turn out. Wait. How cheap everything was? A can of soda at one of the vendors at the statue was 4.50. For the first time, she really looked at her targets. A diamond the size of a softball was on the woman’s left hand. A Rolex watch with red, blue and green pebbles that suspiciously looked like precious jewels was on the man’s right wrist. Coach bags. Perfect, shiny hair and model white teeth. Other seemingly insignificant little things that proved they were well-tailored. Three years of experience led her to the resolution that they had money.
The train hissed to a stop on Astoria-Ditmars and the tourists bustled off. She followed behind silently. What were these rich fashion-pariahs doing in Astoria? Shouldn’t they be on a yacht heading for the Mediterranean or something?
The couple was going towards the steps and she knew if she was going to do this, she had to do it now. If they went down the stairs, it wouldn’t be as crowded and there would be more of a chance she was seen. She knew that as soon as she did it, she would have to get back to Manhattan. If they truly were as well-endowed as she thought, the man would probably notice the missing wallet sooner than average people. She slipped behind the man and reverted to an old cheap technique; she slid her hand into the man’s pocket and withdrew his wallet then discreetly put it in her pocket. The tourists went on, oblivious to the fact they were just pick pocketed. The wallet was heavy in her pocket and she turned to go to the other side of the station, back to her city.
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I realized that since this is going to be a novel type thing, it shouldn't go straight into the climax immediately. I'm probably going to have another 3-4 chapters then I'll get into the meat of things. Maybe I'll have her almost mugged or something. But that's not the climatic part. I know what I'm doing for that
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