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His face was streaked with blood, crimson and dry on his cheek. His jaw was flecked with freckles, his blue eyes sparkled with exhilaration. He bit his bottom lip, tasting the blood on his tongue. He swallowed, trying to rid the lump from his throat.
‘You know,’ A voice whispered from behind making Gage press his hands to his face and try to hide the blood. ‘It’s not life or death Gage, it’s just a sandwich.’
‘Dash, you frightened me,’
‘That would be a first,’ He whispered before raising his eyebrows ‘Where did that blood come from?’ He looked down at the sandwich on the ground. ‘Lunch doesn’t usually bleed.’
‘It was his.’ He held up a wallet, Dash squinted at the drivers license.
‘Cooper Thomas’
Dash rolled his eyes, he pressed his fingers to his temples. Rubbing and muttering incoherently.
‘Jesus, Gage, you’re what fourteen?’
‘Twelve.’
‘Twelve!’ He threw his hands at the sky. ‘Jesus Christ, can you just not murder someone for at least a week?’
‘No’ He smiled, showing his jagged teeth, the scar on his cheek made a dent in the blood.
Dash pulled on Gage’s shirt.
‘Get in the car, kid.’
‘I’m not a kid, Dash.’
‘Whatever’
Gage opened his eyes wide. ’I’ll kill you, Dash, I’m not sure how well your wife would take it though.’
‘For fuck sake Gage, if you killed me you would have no one to stop Mae from telling the cops, or killing you herself.’
‘I doubt that.’
‘I wouldn’t fucking doubt it, now get in the car and pick that damn sandwich up, I’m hungry.’
The car was black with leather interior and when he breathed the smell of blood filled his lungs.
Dash sighed.
‘He’s in the trunk, isn’t he?’
‘Where else?’
‘I shouldn’t answer that question, should I Gage?’
‘Not really.’
There was a pause, the air was arid. The stench clung to the inside of Dash’s nose.
‘How old was he?’
‘Thirty one, with two children, Aubin and Darcy. His wife’s name was Addison Thomas and he owned a cat, Kibbles.’
‘Kibbles,’ He muttered. ‘Real original.’
Gage nodded.
‘I wonder if his kids will miss him, his wife even.’ Dash felt chagrin run through him, he creased his eyebrows.
‘He hits Aubin and Addison, not Darcy though because Darcy looks like him and when he hurts Darcy he is reminded of what his own father used to do, I’m sure they won’t miss him.’
‘How do you know?’
‘He told me.’
Dash bit his lip and nodded his head.
‘It’s true.’ Gage said, while shrugging his shoulders.
‘I have no reason to doubt you.’
Gage grinned, the scar on his cheek still making a dent in the blood.
‘Drive, Dash.’ Gage ordered, almost growling. ‘I’ve never been caught and I don’t want to start now.’
Dash quickly put his hands on the steering wheel. Gage pulled his smile to one side of his face and scrunched his noise.
‘I scared you, didn’t I Dash?’
Dash didn’t reply, he pushed his black hair away from his thin face. His nose was pointed at the end. His skin stuck to his collarbone, screening it’s every dent and crevice. His bare stomach was ashen and dark jeans clung to his legs.
Gage tapped his shoulder.
‘Hurry, Ace won’t be happy if we’re late and stop at a,’ He hesitated, cringing at the word. ’public toilet. I need to wash the blood from my face.’
‘Sure Gage.’
Gage rested against the seat. He flicked his russet hair over his forehead and closed his eyes. His nose was littered in freckles, as well as his jaw line.
When the car stopped Gage stumbled out into the toilet, besieged the walls. He stared in the mirror, standing on his toes. Smiling at the blood that covered his face.
Without glancing away he turned the tap. Water rushed out, spraying on his shirt. He drenched his face, grimacing as the last of the blood was washed away. Gage pulled his shirt from his gaunt body and threw it over his shoulder. He could hear whispering outside but the Dash pressed the car horn and Gage burst out into the night.
He staggered into the car.
‘Drive.’
‘Okay, sleep Gage.’
‘I think I’ll take up your offer.’
***
Gage stretched his body out, his stomach bare. His shoulders were covered in freckles and the cigarette in his hand made signals in the air.
Dash raised his eyebrows at the boy.
‘Where’s your mother?’ He raised his chin.
‘Dead.’ Gage bit his lip and put the cigarette in his mouth, when he took it out again, blood stained it and Gage smiled.
‘Oh, right, father?’ Dash whispered.
‘Dead.’
‘How’d they die, Gage?’
‘I killed them.’
‘Right.’ He nodded his head,
There was a pause, smoke hung in the air. He could feel the blood trickling down his chin. His eyes are dull blue, gleaming with resentment in the light hanging loosely from the ceiling.
***
Droplets clung to his body, like dew at dawn. He traced his contours with his gaunt fingers. The evening light shone through his window, casting shadows on his walls. Gage frowned at his reflection, everyday he was looking more like his father. His long flat lips pressed on his face, soon he would have stubble on his chin and tiny hairs would grow around his nipples.
He leant his hand on a desk, his fingers traced the plastic white. There were two dates carved into the plastic, one with two names next to it. He grimaced when his fingertips felt the crevices.
‘Adalyn and Gaspard.’ He whispered his parents names and the date that he had murdered them.
After that he paused for a moment before whispering a name that had been dying to leap from his lips. It was carved further from his parent’s because every day of his life he regretted sinking his teeth into her throat and ripping her apart.
‘Javier’
He remembered her eyes like sunsets, green and gold glittering in the light. Her hair hung down her back, brown streaked with blonde. He nose was wide and freckles cluttered her cheekbones.
He opened his eyes as Ace’s voice rung through the hall. Her Dutch accent could slightly be heard through her words.
‘Gage, darling, breakfast is ready.’
He groaned and threw on his jeans, black and loose around his ankles. He smiled at himself in the mirror as he pulled on his shirt, with Iron Maiden written in letters bigger than he remember from last time he’d worn it. He open the door, and smiled at the short haired lady standing with the top of her head just above his. She had a freckle on her cheek and her lips were thin but she twisted them into a smile, ruining their beautiful intricacy.
She pressed her tiny hands against Gage’s face.
‘You are growing so tall my little Gage,’ She whispered before she pressed her lips against his forehead. ‘You look like your father, everyday you are more beautiful.’
There was silence, were he was positive she would smell the smoke floating from the crack in door. He pulled his arms around her neck and liked fire burned within him, he kissed the bridge of her nose.
‘I am extremely lucky that you have never left me.’ He smiled.
‘What would I be if I left you when your mother asked me to stay?’
‘Thank you, nanny.’
She watched his face and when he smiled the scar on his cheek deepened.
***
Gage can hear her screams echo inside his head. His teeth sink into her flesh. Her eyes are squeezed shut. The pain burns into her, like hot metal on raw skin. The pale night turns to morning as her crimson blood makes every hair on his neck stand on end. Gage can feel the static inside him as her blood reaches his, like ice travelling through his veins. He kisses her chest, pressing his lips against her collarbone.
Every strand of her hair is stuck to another with thickets of blood.
Her name is Chester. He has done his research, he has stared into her brown eyes before now. He has pressed his own skin against hers, she has trusted him.
She is soaked with her own blood when he kisses her lips.
His fingers trace her cheek.
‘We will meet again soon.’
His footsteps ricochet through her.
‘Wait,’ She screams, wiping the blood from her face. ’What am I?’
‘You are what I am,’ He paused, biting his lip. ’A monster.’
She whispers now, her voice is rough, it breaks the morning air.
‘Vampire,’
But Gage is gone, nodding his head as he walks.
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