The Beat of the Jungle

Tinkling water, peacefully running downstream,
Sounding like bells, far away in the distance.
The sound of the Elephant's footsteps,
Like drums, crashing and banging.
Thunder sounds like cymbals,
Keeping you awake for hours on end.
The beat of the jungle is really quite exciting,
And amusment isn't rare,
But when life gets really wild,
I'd run.

I really liked this! Short, but well structured and a great ending. Just occasionaly you need to be careful and watch the syllable count in a few of your lines. It may have just been me but there were one or two that didn't quite flow well together. If you could add another verse in the middle that would be really nice as it would make it more into a story type poem. Great work!

Nice work with the poem structure. I really the last part ;D.

Hey,

I really liked this poem, but it was kinda of short no matter though. I rellay like the ending. Keep writing.

~Lana

The syllables were a bit out in places but you've created the escense of the jungle in very few lines which is a real achievement. you're structure is good as well, makes me a little envious of you because i'm awful with structure, I really liked it, it's a lovely piece of work.

It was cute, short and quaint. Obviously there are some tiny errors since you wrote it when you were 10, but it was overall really good. I especially liked the last two lines:

But when life gets really wild,
I'd run.

Keep Writing!