Even When You Died

When you screamed, I loved you.
When you lied, I loved you.
When you punished, I loved you.
I still love you now.

When you died, I loved you.
You died three times that night.
They brought you back again,
But you were not the same.

When you hurt, I loved you.
So much I wished I could
Take all the pain you ever felt
And throw it in the trash.

When you spoke, I loved you.
I heard you say my name.
Over time you learned
Just how to live again.

When you walked, I loved you.
Everyone was proud of you,
But we both knew that somehow,
Only I really understood.

Now you cope, and I love you.
For how strong you are
and how you still helped me
as I desperately tried to help you.

Yes, Daddy, I love you.
When you were stern,
Strong, weak, or caring.
I loved you, and I always will.

Spoiler

Another poem for my dad. He was in a motorcycle accident, and he lost his leg. Even when he was in so much pain and such a dire situation, he still worried about my brother and I. I love him so much.

I feel so bad for you. I could never imagine that happening to my dad. If I lost him in any way, it would be devastating. He's already had a lot of supposed-to-be-fatal diseases. He just has this crazy immune system! But, wow...I don't know what to say. I loved it.

On an insensitive, technical side, check out the second stanza, third line. Should there be a capital after that comma? Is that within your style here? And in stanza for you have all capitals but are missing a comma/period. Check that out, too. In stanza six, you just ditched the whole capitalization thing. Other than that it was wonderful in the best sense to use a word like that.

I again can't imagine what it's like, and, I feel bad knowing I could never take his pain. Stay strong throughout anything.

--Skis

Hello there. Nice title. It's catchy.

Nitpicks:

When you screamed, I loved you.
When you lied, I loved you.
When you punished, I loved you.
I still love you now.

- Wow. This seemed like the chorus of a song. xD

You died three times that night.

- How did he 'die' three times?

They brought you back again,

- Who are 'they'? (This was clarified in the spoiler but I hope you could clarify this in the poem alone.)

When you hurt, I loved you.
So much I wished I could
Take all the pain you ever felt
And throw it in the trash.

- Didn't you mean 'When you were hurt' in the first line? You said that 'he felt pain' in the following lines.


First of all, it's so sad about your dad. I hope he gets better. ^_^ You laid out the emotion in the poem very well. I, as a reader, can easily say that you really love your father. I think it'd be awesome if he read this. And I thought from the beginning until the last verse that this was another poem about a tragic love story. Turns out, it is about your father. You did a nice job making that 'twist/revelation' in the end. Also, I didn't find anything wrong in the poem other than what I nitpicked.

Never stop writing!

Wow! This is really good!

Well Written!

~FW~

This is such a touching piece! I loved every part of it! It had so much emotion but too much as to overwhelm the reader. It was just right Keep it up!