Devoid Lane of Memories

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Hello there,

This is a really interesting and creative peice of writing and I really enjoyed reading it. I thought it had a great plot and I understand the whole 'two is company, three is a crowd' idea. I really liked how you put parts of the story in italics to emphasise parts of your story. I know you're not looking for constuctive critiscism but I don't think you should have put 'the end' at the final part of the story it just ruins the story in my opinion. I couldn't find any grammar or spelling mistakes. Overall it was really great. Keep up the awesome writing.

From CuteJackRussell
Hello,
I doubt you will take the time to look at this signature, you are all busy people and I respect that, but if you do know this. Every bit of criticism on my writing has helped and every bit of advice you have given me has also helped. So thank you, for everything.
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